Give Details in Small Doses

written by Mikaela Cowles on January 21, 2016 in Tips with no comments

Give readers details in small doses

Help your reader absorb all of the information you’re sharing by delivering it in small doses.

Despite being six-foot-five, Tracy has the tiniest toes of everyone who lives in Midget Town, the country’s safe haven for little people who want to feel normal.

Oh. My. Goodness.

Did you just take a deep breath? I did. That darn sentence has so many details getting them all out feels like your tongue’s playing twister. If we unpack this sentence we know: 

  • Tracy is six-foot-five.
  • She has tiny toes.
  • She lives in Midget Town.
  • Little people live in Midget Town.
  • Midget Town is a safe haven for little people who want to feel normal.

 

The Solution

Identify sentences that contain more than three pieces of information. Break these sentences into multiple sentences. This will allow you to gradually give your readers details.

For example, you could easily break Tracy’s sentence into two:

Despite being six-foot-five, Tracy has tiny toes. They’re the tiniest toes of everyone who lives in Midget Town, the country’s safe haven for little people who want to feel normal. 

 





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